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MarkThompson
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Looks pretty good. Four remaining comments:
- You are missing a quilisma on the word “et” of “et super nivem” in the Asperges.
- I still find the separation of syllables on “ista” in the Vidi Aquam very hard to make out. Maybe if you put a hyphen in and made it “i-sta” that would at least give a clue that the singer is supposed to change syllables.
- All in all, it could stand much closer fine-tuning with respect to placement of text syllables under the neumes. For instance, look at “dicent” in the next line. Is there any reason for “di-” to start so far to the left? Or two lines down, couldn’t the “-am in” of “quoniam in saeculum” stand to be moved half an en’s width or so to the left? And so on and so on. Look how far to the left the first syllable (Mi-) of the psalm verse in the Asperges comes in. Yes, I’m being picky, but if you’d like my opinion on what it would take to make this look professionally typeset, well, there you go.
- You should put the V/ sign before the Amen in the prayer at the end of both sides.