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authorkiwi
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This quote is from Worth the Chase: Finding Love God’s Way
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DaveBj
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Not really. Was it supposed to be?
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ellam25
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I don’t get it.
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midori
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Mm, bad spelling, bad punctuation, and subpar layout distract from the joke.
“Glitering” should be “glittering”, and something should be toggled so it doesn’t get broken into an awkward hyphenation.
“Glued to” (vs “glued on”?) is hard for me to really get a feel for, because I’d normally gravitate towards an expression more along the lines of “only have eyes for me”. It doesn’t sound like natural conversation, so it makes me overthink the phrasing, and when you overthink things, it spoils the joke.
“What if I wear glittering jewels, would his eyes be glued to me alone?” might be better phrased as:
“If I wore glittering jewels, would his eyes be glued to [on?] me alone?”
or perhaps
“What if I wore glittering jewels? Would his eyes be glued to [on?] me alone?”
Putting Brendan’s words in a separate box would be helpful in isolating punchline from the preceding thought. Attributing it to Brendan specifically is clunky, unless your people know who Brendan is and care about his jokes. “Lol” is sort of unnecessary at the end-- it’s sort of a punctuation that says, “This is the part where you laugh, too!” and you’re never supposed to laugh at your own joke.
Toggle things so that “finding” isn’t another awkwardly hyphenated word.
“Glitering” should be “glittering”, and something should be toggled so it doesn’t get broken into an awkward hyphenation.
“Glued to” (vs “glued on”?) is hard for me to really get a feel for, because I’d normally gravitate towards an expression more along the lines of “only have eyes for me”. It doesn’t sound like natural conversation, so it makes me overthink the phrasing, and when you overthink things, it spoils the joke.
“What if I wear glittering jewels, would his eyes be glued to me alone?” might be better phrased as:
“If I wore glittering jewels, would his eyes be glued to [on?] me alone?”
or perhaps
“What if I wore glittering jewels? Would his eyes be glued to [on?] me alone?”
Putting Brendan’s words in a separate box would be helpful in isolating punchline from the preceding thought. Attributing it to Brendan specifically is clunky, unless your people know who Brendan is and care about his jokes. “Lol” is sort of unnecessary at the end-- it’s sort of a punctuation that says, “This is the part where you laugh, too!” and you’re never supposed to laugh at your own joke.
Toggle things so that “finding” isn’t another awkwardly hyphenated word.
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Convert1
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Um…sorry, no clue what this means. 
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Allegra
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And after all that work…Nope. Sorry. Still not funny.Mm, bad spelling, bad punctuation, and subpar layout distract from the joke.
“Glitering” should be “glittering”, and something should be toggled so it doesn’t get broken into an awkward hyphenation.
“Glued to” (vs “glued on”?) is hard for me to really get a feel for, because I’d normally gravitate towards an expression more along the lines of “only have eyes for me”. It doesn’t sound like natural conversation, so it makes me overthink the phrasing, and when you overthink things, it spoils the joke.
“What if I wear glittering jewels, would his eyes be glued to me alone?” might be better phrased as:
“If I wore glittering jewels, would his eyes be glued to [on?] me alone?”
or perhaps
“What if I wore glittering jewels? Would his eyes be glued to [on?] me alone?”
Putting Brendan’s words in a separate box would be helpful in isolating punchline from the preceding thought. Attributing it to Brendan specifically is clunky, unless your people know who Brendan is and care about his jokes. “Lol” is sort of unnecessary at the end-- it’s sort of a punctuation that says, “This is the part where you laugh, too!” and you’re never supposed to laugh at your own joke.
Toggle things so that “finding” isn’t another awkwardly hyphenated word.
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DaveBj
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There is a positive to the meme; the model looks like actress France Nuyen. I fell in love with her the first time I saw South Pacific.
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CaptFun
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7_Sorrows
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I agree. I even had a hard time noticing it since I use my smartphone.Mm, bad spelling, bad punctuation, and subpar layout distract from the joke.
“Glitering” should be “glittering”, and something should be toggled so it doesn’t get broken into an awkward hyphenation.
“Glued to” (vs “glued on”?) is hard for me to really get a feel for, because I’d normally gravitate towards an expression more along the lines of “only have eyes for me”. It doesn’t sound like natural conversation, so it makes me overthink the phrasing, and when you overthink things, it spoils the joke.
“What if I wear glittering jewels, would his eyes be glued to me alone?” might be better phrased as:
“If I wore glittering jewels, would his eyes be glued to [on?] me alone?”
or perhaps
“What if I wore glittering jewels? Would his eyes be glued to [on?] me alone?”
Putting Brendan’s words in a separate box would be helpful in isolating punchline from the preceding thought. Attributing it to Brendan specifically is clunky, unless your people know who Brendan is and care about his jokes. “Lol” is sort of unnecessary at the end-- it’s sort of a punctuation that says, “This is the part where you laugh, too!” and you’re never supposed to laugh at your own joke.
Toggle things so that “finding” isn’t another awkwardly hyphenated word.
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GEddie
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Stealth humor, if at all.
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St_Francis
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If I wear glittering jewels, will his eyes be glued only on me?
(or to me?–either seems to work)
The glitter thing has distracted me so much that by the time I read “Brendan’s” line, I see his eyes literally glued to the jewels (Because in my day, glitter was attached to paper by glue, and I am not sure how girls attach glitter now.)
Sorry, I think you need to start over. Maybe shoot for a statement with punch rather than humor?
And also, the font, the color, the layout–all wrong. I could barely read only some of it (which is why I was thinking glitter…) For something like that, never, ever hyphenate!!! Center it, put in your own line breaks to make it prettier and/or more understandable, put in line breaks directly after the word (no word space). If there are two comments, double line space between them.
If I wear glittering jewelry,
will he have eyes only for me?
No, he’ll be eyeing your jewelry.
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(or to me?–either seems to work)
The glitter thing has distracted me so much that by the time I read “Brendan’s” line, I see his eyes literally glued to the jewels (Because in my day, glitter was attached to paper by glue, and I am not sure how girls attach glitter now.)
Sorry, I think you need to start over. Maybe shoot for a statement with punch rather than humor?
And also, the font, the color, the layout–all wrong. I could barely read only some of it (which is why I was thinking glitter…) For something like that, never, ever hyphenate!!! Center it, put in your own line breaks to make it prettier and/or more understandable, put in line breaks directly after the word (no word space). If there are two comments, double line space between them.
If I wear glittering jewelry,
will he have eyes only for me?
No, he’ll be eyeing your jewelry.
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Crown_of_Stars
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Not really.
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Allegra
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I’m still confused. Do guys even look at jewelry? I’m pretty sure that the difficulties the world is having in the romantic arena are NOT caused by men’s preoccupation with jewelry!
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Allegra
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Wait…is the jewelry a metaphor?
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St_Francis
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I took the jewelry as a metaphor
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Allegra
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Then at least it makes more sense.I took the jewelry as a metaphor
Still not funny though.
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7_Sorrows
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Why are we even being asked? Did the OP create this or design it?
I am confused as well.
I am confused as well.
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